Subject Line: We want YOU to Be the Buyer
Date: Saturday, September 17, 2011****
We all suffer from inbox overload, too many messages and too little time. Using a scanable subject line can make or break a campaign. And that's why I love this message from LuLu Lemon. With one word and a hash tag they've cut through the clutter and created compelling reason to open.
However, playing the cram-it-all-in-a-carry-on game means I also have to abide by the TSA's carry-on requirements, which means my giant bottle of SPF 80 goes on the no fly list. You'd think that since I'm such an eager packer I'd plan for the 3.4oz or less limitation on liquids, gels, and aerosols - but for some reason that predicament always seems to sneak up on me. Thankfully, this email from Origins (above) popped into my inbox to smartly remind me of their convenient TSA-approved set of mini products. The email is cleanly designed, the copy is thoughtful, it's well-timed to catch me before my summer adventures, and even includes a fun little animation to grab my attention (seen right). Not only does Origins get the TSA's approval, their emails definitely earn my stamp of approval, too.From: Orbitz
Subject Line: Lisa, need a flight to Stockholm? Fares from $554 round-trip.
Date: Wednesday, April 6, 2011
There are so many things that are right about this email that I don't know where to begin! I'm just going to take it from top top bottom.
1. The Subject Line: Yes, I am Lisa. Yes, I am searching for a flight to Stockholm. While personalization can sometimes err on the side of gratuitous, the double data points included here are working for me. This is relevancy.
2. The Preheader: Love that the "add to address book" language links out to a page with different instructions based on email reader.
3. The Body: The treatment of personalized data, down to the city name embedded in the call-to-action button, is impressive. Here we have an excellent melding of HTML-friendly text, dynamic data and cute copy (in the subheadline.)
4. The Submessaging: The graphical submessage division treatments are light enough such that they don't feel boxy, but clear enough to delineate one message from another. The headline treatment variation and sidebar inclusion add to the positive aesthetic experience.
5. The Customer Stories: "Price Assurance" is a difficult concept to communicate in just a few words. While Orbitz does a good job of this with the siderail copy ("Get cash refunds ... automatically / Never overpay on Orbitz"), the addition of reifying stories from actual customers makes an ethereal benefit real.
From: Apple
Subject Line: Introducing iPad 2.
Date: Wednesday, March 2, 2011
Our subscribers communicate via text messages, IMs and 140-character Tweets. Apple knows this. You can tell by the way they message their iPad 2. There are really no complete sentences here, just three-word maximum data points! It's pure Ernest Hemingway.
"Thinner. Lighter. Faster. FaceTime. Smart Covers. 10-hour battery. Coming March 11. Starting at $499."
While I appreciate clean and airy graphics as much as the next aesthete, I would observe that the thumb here is so antiseptic as to feel vaguely strange and off-putting.
From: Dropbox
Subject Line: Start using Dropbox!
Date: Thursday, February 10, 2011
While I appreciate a cute illustration as much as the next aspiringartist, and while I respect an automated message as much as the next digital marketer, I felt slightly violated when I received Dropbox's "Start using Dropbox!" email message. While I did download the software, I wasn't aware that I gave the company explicit permission to look inside my machine to see whether or not I'd actually installed it.
I believe they could have done right here by changing up the messaging. This message would have been better positioned as implicit rather than explicit. Less "we noticed you don't have the software installed," more "check out our installation tutorials!"
Tone is super-critical to data-informed automated messaging. Don't overlook the importance of your copy when it comes to these types of delicate messages.

This Gymboree message serves as a good reminder that the holidays are an important time to send non-promotional messages to your subscribers. Sending holiday greetings messages or thank-you messages like this one reaffirm your relationship with subscribers and show that you're not just concerned with dollars. Gymboree's simple subject line "Thank You From Our CEO" and the clean letter format make the email feel authentic. My only complaint is that they copy may be a bit too long - especially with such small, gray text.
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From: Saks Fifth Avenue Subject Line: Boots, Boots, and more Boots Date: September 19 |
From: Piperlime Subject Line: The season's "it" boot + the top 10 fall trends Date: September 15 |
From: Nordstrom Subject Line: Hot Boots Under $100 | Last Chance for Triple Rewards Points (Details Inside) Date: September 19 |
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The Saks subject line pretty much sums it up: Boots, Boots, and more Boots. About this time every year, my inbox is inundated with the must-have boots of the season. Just check out these three emails I received in the last week. Hands down, my favorite is the Saks email. It's the only one that gives me a full-on view of the breadth of their boot collection. And I really like the fact that they kept it pure, without a secondary message for this one. Piperlime always has great copy and photography, so I kinda wish they'd shown more of an assortment for this email. Instead, they focused on the IT style of the season: the over-the-knee boot. I'm sure they'll showcase more boots in the weeks to come, but it'd be a shopper's dream come true to see all those pretty boots in one email. The secondary message is good in theory, but the execution is a little confusing. The landing page is really cool, so I wish they'd turned this message into a dedicated email and done it a bit more justice. I rarely get excited about Nordstrom emails, and this one is no exception. It doesn't feel fresh and exciting to me. It feels like a department store email. And that's a bummer. The boots themselves are cool, but they feel like the product shot feels dark and dreary. Maybe it's rich in print, but not so much here. The secondary stories are buzz-worthy, but again, they fall flat in execution. They don't inspire me to click through. I want them to inspire me. But they just don't. So, who wins the battle of the boots this year? For me, it's all about Piperlime. I have 5 pairs waiting in my shopping cart. Time to check out, folks. |
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